The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashton Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarized information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashton Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarized information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how many people have visited the Ashdown Museum before and after its renovation. The charts
also
demonstrate the proportion of
visitors
' satisfaction during these two periods of time. It is observed that the refurbishment not only did attract more
visitors
but
also
greatly enhanced their satisfaction levels.
Furthermore
, the number of dissatisfied declined marginally after refurbishment.
In contrast
, the figure for no response remains constant in these periods. It is worth noting that the whole number of
visitors
increased significantly following the redevelopment. It rose from 74000 to 92000. With regard to the pie charts, the survey results highlighted substantial changes in visitor satisfaction. Before the renovation, only 15% of people were very satisfied, but
this
figure was 35% after modernization.
Similarly
, the proportion of satisfied
visitors
rose from 30% to 40% during these periods.
In contrast
, the percentage of dissatisfied people dropped dramatically, from 40% before improvement to 15% after that.
Moreover
, the proportion of very dissatisfied
visitors
decreased from 10% to 5%. Meanwhile, the figure for those who gave no response remained constant at 5%.
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