The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.

The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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The two charts represent
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information about Australia’s population
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different nationalities and areas.
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,
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Australians are clearly dominating the percentage by at least 59% from others. As the Australians were the most popular residents in the country, the second biggest percentage went to a mix of other nationalities, with the British following up in the third place. Three
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places combine New Zealanders, the Chinese and the Dutch adding up to only 6%. The Dutch and the Australians made up the most space of any other
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in the countryside.
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, the Chinese and New Zealanders were the two biggest communities in the cities. In sharp contrast to
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, 99% of the Chinese people chose to live in cities rather than the countryside. Following them was the population of New Zealand with 90% picking city life. Third
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the British
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pretty close to New Zealanders only one
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away from them.
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, 80% of the natives chose cities rather than the countryside, being the smallest percentage of all the countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic data
  • population distribution
  • nationality groups
  • urban planning
  • cultural diversity
  • social policy
  • demographic trends
  • rural vs. urban distribution
  • reflect on the implications
  • cultural exchange
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