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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.
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The given bar chart illustrates the various modes of transportation like
bus
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,
car
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, bike and
foot
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 used by
people
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 for work in of the city in Europe in 1960,1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the data indicates that the most popular means of transport were walking in 1960,
bus
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 in 1980 and
car
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 in 2000.
Moreover
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, it can be understood that the
use
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 of
bike
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bikes
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 and
foot
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 as a means of
tranport
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transport
 to work decreased over the period of 40 years.
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, travelling
through
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by
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car
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 gained
the
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apply
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popularity over the period
whereas
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, the
use
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 of
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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 fluctuated.
According to
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 the data,
people
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 started to travel less by both bike and
foot
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 over the period of 40 years. In terms of
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bus
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buses
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, almost 27
people
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 travelled
through
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by
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bus
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 in 1960 which declined to almost 7% by 2000.
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, the
use
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 of
foot
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also
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 dipped by 25% from 1960 to 2000. Around 20
people
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 travelled to work by
bus
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 in 1960 which increased upto 28 in 1980 and again declined significantly to almost 17
people
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 in 2000. Only the
use
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 of
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car
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cars
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 showed a significant growth of almost 30% from 1960 to 2000.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, car, foot, people, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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