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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation ?

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It is extremely crucial for
people
 to own
an
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house
 rather than rent
one
 in some countries. There are a variety of reasons for the case, and
this
 case may have a positive situation
for
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 several ways On the
one
 hand, there are two primary reasons why
people
 prefer to have
a
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 own
house
 rather than rent a
house
.
One
 reason is that
,
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 owning a
house
 may bring a sense of stability and security. It allows individuals and families to feel secure as they do not have to worry about
uncertainty
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the uncertainty
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 of rent increases or being asked to move.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, when the
house
 is owned by
people
, it is a good way to have wealth building.
The homeownership
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 is often seen as a way to build
weath
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wealth
. Over time, the property may increase in value , providing the owner with an asset that can be sold for profit or
pass
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 down as
inheritance
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an inheritance
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This
 case has a positive impact on several ways when
people
 own a
house
.
Firstly
, The
people
owing
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owning
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 the
house
 may have a feeling of
fiancial
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financial
 independence. Owning a home can provide
long -term
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 financial security because the owner may not have a burden .
Secondly
 , some
peole
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people
 will feel emotional satisfaction.
People
 feel a sense of pride and accomplishment in
owing
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owning
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 their home . It can lead to
stronger
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 connection to the community as
people
 may stay in
one
 place longer In conclusion, owning a
house
 rather than renting can have significant positive impacts on individuals and families.
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The topic of the importance of home ownership is well-addressed, covering reasons for preference and the positive impacts.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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