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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
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given
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table chart gives information about how
percentage
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 of
spendings
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such
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 as
food
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, clothes ,and leisure
were
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consumed in specific five countries in 2002.
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, it is noticeable that residents in five nations have used the part of
food
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, beverages and tobacco the most
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 other parts were not preferred compared with former. In detail,
acoording
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according
 to the statistical data for
food
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 in 2002,
the
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32
percent
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per cent
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 of
turkish
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Turkish
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 people
consumed
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consumed it
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, recording the biggest
percentage
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. The second largest figure was in
lreland
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Ireland
 at 28%, even though the rest of the three countries belonged to Italy, Spain, and Sweden were had at 16%, 18% and 15%, respectively.
Rgarding
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Regarding
 the remaining information in 2002, the second biggest
percentage
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 was for clothing and footwear. Unlike the mentioned
percentage
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, the three nations which accounted for consuming
food
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 less tended to be greater than Ireland and Turkey, written with 9%, 6%, and 5%, respectively.
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, the
percentage
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 of leisure and education in Turkey showed the largest level at 4%, including
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at least double.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • consumer spending
  • cultural priorities
  • economic conditions
  • disposable income
  • standard of living
  • work-life balance
  • proportion of spending
  • cultural preferences
  • comparison of spending
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