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The chart below shows the number of four different species of fish between 1982 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of four different species of fish between 1982 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the line chart provides information about the
numbers
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 of four different types of fish between the years 1982 and 2007.
overall
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, the four fish species are swordfish,
yellow fin
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yellow-fin
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tuna
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, haddock and
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atlantic
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Atlantic
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 cod.
there
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their
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numbers
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 are
flactuaiting
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fluctuating
 over the years, yet some species'
number
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numbers
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 are constant through the mentioned rivals. we'll go through
som
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some
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 specifications below. even though it is a long period of time,
yet
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apply
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the
sword fish
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swordfish
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along with
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 haddock
numbers
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 was steady throughout
alomst
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almost
 three generations, with 10
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thousends
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thousands
thousand
 and 70
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thousends
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thousand
 of swordfish and haddock respectively.
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atlantic
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Atlantic
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 cod experienced two delined trends, from 1982 to 1992 and from 2002 to 2007. their
numbers
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 drop in the first period from 230
thousend
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thousand
 to 150
thousend
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thousand
, and from 180 to 140
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thousends
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thousand
 in the
seconed
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second
 period.
in addition
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,
the
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apply
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yellow fin
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yellowfin
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tuna
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 has
expereinced
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experienced
also
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 two
decreas
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decreased
 trends, from 1992 to 2002 their
nubmer
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number
has
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apply
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changed from 200 to 135
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thousends
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thousands
thousand
,
moreover
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, from 2002 to 2007 with less decline rate, their amount
has
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apply
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changed in the rival from 135 to 100
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thousends
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thousands
thousand
. both
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atlantic
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Atlantic
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 and
yellow
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Yellow Tuna
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tuna
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has
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have
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 one up trend in two different time zones.
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atlantic
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Atlantic
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 up trend was
in
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from
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 2002 to 2007 from 100 to 150
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thousends
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thousands
thousand
.
while
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 yellow
tuna
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riseing
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rising
 trend was
in
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from
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 1982 to 1992 from 150 up to 200
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thousends
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thousands
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, tuna, atlantic, thousends with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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