Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people freedom to travel further. However, other think this leads environmental problem, so air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from having it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
One of the heated debates is whether the cost of
air
Use synonyms
travel
Use synonyms
should be expensive or more affordable for the general population.
This
Linking Words
issue divides opinions between those who support affordable
travel
Use synonyms
for wider accessibility and those who prioritize its environmental impact. The following essay will discuss both points of view and give my own perspective.
Firstly
Linking Words
, when
people
Use synonyms
have the opportunity to visit other places, it enhances their chances of gaining new experiences.
However
Linking Words
, not everyone can achieve
this
Linking Words
because
limited
Change preposition
of limited
show examples
funds, especially for transportation.
Therefore
Linking Words
, reducing
air
Use synonyms
travel
Use synonyms
fees can help
people
Use synonyms
from all walks of life by easing the financial burden.
For example
Linking Words
, artists who want to visit London to see an exhibition might
previously
Add a missing verb
have previously
show examples
, but with cheaper accommodation and
travel
Use synonyms
, they can afford it.
As a result
Linking Words
, they can meet their role model and gain inspiration for future artwork.
Secondly
Linking Words
, some
people
Use synonyms
believe the authorities should increase
air
Use synonyms
travel
Use synonyms
costs
due to
Linking Words
its environmental effect.
Tourist
Fix the agreement mistake
Tourists
show examples
can contribute to climate change because
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
further
Linking Words
involve
Correct subject-verb agreement
involves
show examples
transportation, especially planes. A survey shows that tourism is responsible for 8% of the world’s carbon emissions, and almost half of those emissions come from aviation.
That is
Linking Words
why making
air
Use synonyms
tickets more expensive would influence
people
Use synonyms
think
Add the particle
to think
show examples
twice before going overseas frequently, which could
consequently
Linking Words
reduce the rise of carbon emissions. In conclusion,
while
Linking Words
the benefit of affordable flight costs allows ordinary
people
Use synonyms
to
travel
Use synonyms
further
Linking Words
, it can have negative impacts on the environment, leading some to advocate for increased costs. In my opinion, flight tickets could be lower during specific times, so the negative impact
people
Use synonyms
fear could be reduced.
Submitted by nineband9s on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Provide specific examples or statistics to support the idea that reducing air travel costs allows people to gain more experiences.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses one main point and fully develops it before moving on to the next.
task achievement
Clarify the environmental impacts by using more precise and specific language to strengthen this part of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay effectively introduces both sides of the argument and provides a balanced view.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion clearly summarizes the main points and presents a personal opinion.
task achievement
The essay includes specific data about tourism's contribution to carbon emissions, making the environmental argument more credible.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratic travel
  • Global diversity
  • Economic benefits
  • Service sector
  • Educational travel
  • International relationships
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Climate crisis
  • Overtourism
  • Infrastructure
  • Cultural heritage
  • Sustainable aviation
  • Carbon offset
  • Global inequality
  • Airline industry
  • Economic downturn
What to do next:
Look at other essays: