The parents of your Australlan friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for himlher. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter • say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party •explain why you won't be able to attend the party •give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time.

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Hello dear Mr

Chris

and Mrs

Chris

, I hope you are doing well. I can't say how much I got happy when I saw your invitation about

Chris

's birthday

party

. In

last

couple months,

Chris

passed hard time in university about doing many exams and task,

then

, I am pretty sure

Chris

will enjoy of being with you and his friends in his birthday

party

. Thank you for your inviting me to

this

party

but unfortunatley I already bought a ticket to travel to see my family on the date which you have the

party

(22th of June).

Therefore

I can not come to

this

party

However

I will be free after 27th of June and I do like to make a plan with

Chris

to go to the Spain as a trip becuase I remmeber

Chris

loves Barcelona and he wants to see not only sightseeing in Barcelona but

also

he wants to see the stadium.

Therefore

, I think it could be a very good plan with him. I'm looking forward to see your response, Best regards, Niyousha

Submitted by Niyoshakhalili on Thu Dec 12 2024

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coherence cohesion

Try to separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs to make your letter more organized.

task achievement

Remember to check for small grammatical errors like 'an hard time' which should be 'a hard time'.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear logical structure, especially with a distinct introduction and closure.

task achievement

The tone is appropriate and friendly for a letter to a friend's parents, which is very fitting.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

179 words

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