Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area.
Dear Authories,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. My name is Diyorbek Olmosov, and I am writing to formally request additional sports
facilities for my age group in my area. I have carefully considered the need for the demand. After thorough consideration, I believe that mention about the current sports
accompaniments available, what kind of additional sports
accessories should be introduced, how the new sports
appliances would be of help for the people in my age group.
I understand that this
may not be easy because you do not only have this
issue, but so many, and I am open to discussing ways to address these issues collaboratively. I am confident that by doing so we both can benefit from its results, and I believe that it will not be much of a problem, and it would have a positive impact on our progress.
Thank you for taking the time to review my asking. I am more than willing to provide any additional information or clarification if needed. I look forward to the possibility of fulfilling my request and appreciate your attention to this
matter.
Yours faithfully,
Diyorbek Olmosov.Submitted by Teo Halimov on
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task achievement
The letter could be improved by specifically naming which additional sports facilities you think would benefit the age group.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetition and make arguments clearer and more direct.
task achievement
It's important to directly address the issue and provide more detailed examples or statistics if possible.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate to the formal letter.
task achievement
The letter maintains a respectful and formal tone throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite