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The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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data
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students
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 who are studying in
Humanities
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education
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,
science
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,
physics
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 , IT and engineering in university in 2011 in
Australia
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 .
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study
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 in
humanities
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education
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science
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physics
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 make a large
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proportion
, IT and engineering are
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chosen
 with less percentage.
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majority
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 of
tudents
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students
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born
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Australia
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Science
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physics
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, IT and engineering, there are
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students
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 selecting
humanities
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education
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. Female
students
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humanities
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education
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science
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physics
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and physics
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 account for 72%, 68%, 52%,
56
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and 56
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% respectively, female percentage for
humanites
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humanities
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 highest at 72%.
Students
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 who are females select It and engineering for a moderate rate at roughly 15%.
Students
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 who are first language
not
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born
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Australia
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 prefer to select 4 departments
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science
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physics
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, IT and engineering rather than
humanities
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 and
education
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. the proportion of
students
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 who are first language
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humanities
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 and
born
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were born
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 outside
Australia
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 at the lowest
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 12%, 14%
respecitively
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respectively
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