The graph below gives information about the precentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the precentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of the
population
living in urban cities in four different countries (Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) over three decades with future predictions (2030 and 2040).
Overall
, most preferred people in Malaysia live in urban areas,
while
the percentage of the
population
in the Philippines living in cities decreased in the final year. The number of people in Malaysia living in cities is significantly increasing from around 30% in 1970 to more than 70% in 2020, it is
also
in prediction steadily reach a peak of more than 80% in 2040.
As well as
, Indonesia
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significantly starting with the lowest
population
of four Asian countries around 10% in 1970 becoming 50% in 2020 and will still grow to 2040 around 60%. In terms , the Philippines started with little increase from more than 30% in 1970 to almost 50% in 1990 after that, the proportion of the
population
started to decrease to around 40% in 2010.
However
, The percentage is predicted will increase by more than 50% after three decades.
Also
, the number of people in Thailand steadily increased from 1970 with 19% to more than 40%.
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