The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The map compares the

grange park

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Grange Park

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in 1920 and how

develop

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develops

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today

Overall

it can be seen that

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today

park

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parks

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became

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have become

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more for entertainment and

quit

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quite

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crowded.

To begin

with, in 1920 in the middle of the park there was a fountain and

then

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today

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today,

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replaces

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the rose garden

srounding

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surrounding

with seats. Next to the

fountain

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fountain,

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there was a stage for musicians

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today

change

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the

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amphitheater

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for concerts.

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the right of the map at the top exactly at the

corner

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corner,

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there was

rose

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a rose

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garden and

then

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today

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they

build

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built

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a cafe. Near

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the garden was a pond for water plants they damaged and it

replaces

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the

children

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children's

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play area.

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, they change the class house to the water feature.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words today with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

131 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

pond
northwest corner
large central open area
residential areas
community-oriented space
playground
eastern border
parking lot
convenience
commercial zone
amenities
walking path
encircles
joggers
accessible
entrances

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