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Many peole think that it is important to go to university while others prefer to start work without getting a universty education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
There is an ongoing debate over
is
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whether is
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 it important to go to
university
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 with some saying
that is
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 vital to go to
university
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,
while
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 others argue that they can manage to work without getting
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university
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a university
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 education .As far as I am concerned it is essential to go to
university
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.
Body · 1
   First of all, working is difficult for some people because they may have got
healthy
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health
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problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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.
Body · 2
For example
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:My
neighbor
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neighbour
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can
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could
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 not  see so he
could not
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cannot
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 work
nevertheless
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 he teach pupils about math. My aunt had not got
finger
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the finger
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 and she
can
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could
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 not play the piano
however
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 she is
singer
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a singer
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 but she
wants
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wanted
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 to
playing
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play
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 the piano.
Body · 3
  
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 some people want to
studying
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study
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 it is true.If we follow well, we will
found
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find
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good
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a good
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 salary.Our life is might better than other people and we can buy a lot of cars, mansions even
castle
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castles
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 with money.
Body · 4
For instance
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: My father was well educated in the
university
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, nowadays he is
lawyer
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a lawyer
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 in my country.
Conclusion
   In
conlusion
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conclusion
, there is in
progress
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progressive
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 argument over
is
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whether is
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 it crucial to go to
university
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 with some saying that it is significant to go to
university
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while
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 others
horns
Verb problem
argue
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 that they can manage to work without getting
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university
Add an article
a university
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 education.
Personally
Add a comma
Personally,
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 I reckon it is necessary to go to
university
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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