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Some people say that what individuals do to protect the environment cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect the environment. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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the
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recent years, the extent to which
individuals
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environment
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environmental
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 protection
is
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 a complex and often debated topic.
While
 one school of thought holds that
individuals
 can not make it better with their
contributing
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contribution
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 to
maintain
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maintaining
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 the
environment
, others are of the opinion that it could be
efficience
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efficient
efficiency
 when each
person
 involves
to
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 the process of protecting
environment
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the environment
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.
This
 essay will closely scrutinize
the
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both views before concluding that
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 am
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favor
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 of the latter. On the one hand, it is understandable why some people propose that the
activites
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activities
 of
normal
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a normal
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person
 cannot make
difference
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a difference
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 in protecting the
environment
. The key rationale is that
individuals
 tend to
be
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lack of essential tools and resources to perform the
action
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actions
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what
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that
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 can effectively protect the
environment
.
Moreover
, some people may have not sufficient knowledge in
this
 field,
therefore
, in some
case
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cases
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, their
afford
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effort
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 might not
worth
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 it.
On the other hand
, I side with those
say
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who say that
individuals
 can make it better with their contribution in
anyway
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any way
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. It is true that
environment
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environmental
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 protection requires a
world wide
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worldwide
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 afford from any
person
dueto
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due to
 common living
condition
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conditions
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 of
human
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humans
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. The numerous of man and
woman
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women
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 staying on the earth with individual protection activity possibly
to
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contribute a huge difference in
this
 global issue and definitely make it different.
Recent
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In recent
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 years, many countries have witnessed the reduction of plastic
consumtion
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consumption
 by
citizen
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citizens
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 have
also
record
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an
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possitive
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positive
 effect
in
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environment
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environmental
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 change. In conclusion,
while
 there are justifications that what
individuals
 do to protect the
environment
 cannot make
difference
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a difference
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, I would contend that each
person
 can effectively
involves
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be involved
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 in
this
 process in some way.
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