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You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: • Introduce yourself and your family • Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find • Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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I'm writing in regards to help us find a new house for
accomodation
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accommodation
.Me and my family are moving to Australia next month as we recently signed a new job contract and are planning to settle there. My name is Bijita Gurung. Me and my family have our own bakery business we have been running for 15 years. Perhaps, we recently signed a huge contract.
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, we are soon moving there to
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 run our business. Since we are
family
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a family
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 of 3, we are looking for a small house with 4 bedrooms that can
accomodate upto
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accommodate up to
 5 people. Just in case, there are guests sometimes and we might need to
accomodate
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accommodate
 them. Perhaps,
Townhouse
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townhouses
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 are much preferred.
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, if there is
playzone
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a playzone
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 for kids near the area that would be perfect for my little one. In terms of the location, I was hoping
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we
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 be somewhere near downtown. It would be accessible for us to get to work.
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, it is the centre location. So, it would be easy to commute
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 too. If you get any listings, please let me know. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Bijita Gurung
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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