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Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is an argument about banning
phone
 calls in public or overcrowded places or not. Some
people
 believe that having
phone
 calls is part of their freedom.
This
 essay totally agrees with forbidding conversation in crowded or public places. First of all,
phone
 calls in public should be prohibited for many reasons. One of these reasons is noise pollution which is an important aspect that we have to consider.
For instance
, if we were on public transportation and everyone there was having a call, the amount of noise that would result from each call would be significant. The second reason is
people
's privacy which will be exposed to all the
people
 there, and may lead to critical consequences like stocking.
On the other hand
 ,some
people
 think that they are free to have conversations in public and banning
this
 will restrict their freedom.
Also
, they believe that forbidding these calls means more delay in their daily life since they do a lot of work or discussions by
phone
 calls.
Moreover
, having a short time is one of the reported reasons for doing these calls in public places. The
last
 reason is forbidden the use of phones in public can not be controlled or accepted by other
people
 especially those are cyber consumers
To conclude
, even though some
people
 think that prohibiting routine calls in public spaces is a restriction on their freedom , it has more benefits for the community. I recommend that every public place should have a
phone
 call zone to end
this
 argument.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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