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The charts below show the sales of new cars in 1984, 1993 and 2013.

The charts below show the sales of new cars in 1984, 1993 and 2013.
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The chart
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compares
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 the sales of new
cars
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 in Australia in 1984, 1993 and 2013.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the most popular
car
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models
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 were
sedans
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,
whereas
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 the least
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popular one
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one
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ones
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 were
SUVs
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. As the chart shows, in 1994 the most popular
car
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models
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 were
sedans
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 with 74%, and the least one were
SUVs
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 with 7%,
whereas
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 other
car
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models
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 were 19%. The total
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cars
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number of cars
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had
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sold
were
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 42.900. In 2004
sedans
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 had sold more than other
cars
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, 62% and 21%, respectively,
while
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SUVs
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 had sold 17%. The total
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cars
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number of cars
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were
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was
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 71.000. In April 2013 the total
cars
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were
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 85.000.
SUVs
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 were less than other
cars
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, 17% and 32%. The most popular
car
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models
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 were
sedans
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 with 51%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, car, models, sedans, suvs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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