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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this isa positive or a negative development

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Many
people
 are giving up on the
country side
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 and moving to the city in the past few years,
givin
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giving
given
 up on everything they know and everything they have to start all over again, but is it
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always a good idea? The clean fresh air and the endless field might be appealing to some, as there is nothing like waking up to the scream of a roaster, and the smell of freshly baked bread. Living in rural zones allows
people
 to have a stress-free and
polution-free
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pollution-free
 life, surrounded by greenery and a variety of farm animals like cattle and chicken flocks. All of these elements encourage
poeple
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people
 to stay in the countryside. On the opposite, many
people
 flee their farms
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 and move into big cities, to have
a
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better access to specialized hospitals,
or
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better schools or
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 opportunities for their kids. As
people
 grow up,
the
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farm life becomes more tedious and the burden of keeping everything tidy
in addition
 to catering to their animals,
discourage
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 them from staying in the countryside. In my opinion,
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rural life has a charm, and we should encourage
people
 to live there by providing better schools, hospitals and more
convient
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convenient
 utilities.
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