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Scientists predict in the near future, cars will be driven by computers, not people. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Thảo

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In the fourth technological revolution,
automatic
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 car has become a breakthrough of development in the field of transportation. In my opinion,
although
 it brings many significant benefits,
this
 change
also
 raises many problems. There are many reasons why scientists
believed
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 that common
cars
would
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 be
placed
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 by driverless
cars
 in
near
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 future.
Firstly
, road safety will improve. Most road accidents today are caused by human error,
such
 as distraction, drunk driving, or traffic violations. Autonomous
cars
 with their ability to react quickly and accurately, will reduce these risks.
Secondly
, self-driving
cars
 expand access ability for people who cannot drive themselves,
such
 as the elderly or people with disabilities.
This
 helps improve the quality of life. Tesla, one of the leaders in self-driving
cars
, has developed
the
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 Autopilot system capable of automation thanks to sensors and cameras. In my opinion, robotic car
also
 brings negatives to users. Difficult to determine responsibility when driverless
cars
 cause accidents because the legal regulations on self-driving
cars
 are incomplete.One of the biggest problems is that the jobs of millions of workers in the transport industry could be at risk.
This
 could lead to increased unemployment, causing social unrest in many countries that depend on driver
labor
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.As self-driving taxis are widely deployed, thousands of drivers in Europe are worried about losing their jobs. In conclusion, driverless
cars
 offer a lot of potential in the future, but the disadvantages and challenges of
this
 technology cannot be ignored. Issues need to be solved to ensure the sustainable and safe development of autonomous vehicles.
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