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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources ad money so computers should replace them.however others do not agree .Discuss both sides and give our opinion

#people #libraries #waste #resources #ad #money #computers
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Many people believe that reliance on digital mediums of expression
instead
 of
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traditional
 reading
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forums
 would improve resource allocation. It seems clear why some people would like to hold on
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tradition
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 and go to libraries to get their reading material. It goes back to the old days
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 when the novel technologies were not available yet. It creates a sense of nostalgia, going back to the roots.
Furthermore
,
this
 is not just reading, it is a sensory explosion. One gets to feel, smell, physically and aesthetically admire the chosen book.
Consequently
,
libaries
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libraries
 are
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 utopia for every bookworm,
digitial
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digital
 equivalents were and are not able to substitute. For those valuing efficiency in
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acquisition
 of particular literature, it is no wonder why some would see the physical constraints of a library as burdensome. Reading on a digital device nowadays allows for greater
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flexibility
 in reading choices
as well as
 better note-taking possibilities.
Additionally
, it is virtually limitless when it comes to
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storage
abilites
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abilities
, which no physical place can outmatch.
Overall
,
however
, I believe the preference for the medium of choice when reading is highly personal. It all depends on one's goals,
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practicability
tractability
portability
 requirements
as well as
 sentiments towards traditional values. The two
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distinct
distance
 ways are not mutually exclusive and can be combined
accordingly
 without
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 one useless or wasteful because each
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 a different user's experience.
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