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The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.

The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.
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bar graph illustrates information about the three main exports of Scotland which are international
tourism
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,
dairy
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products
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 and
meat
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products
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 in the
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 2000, 20.. and predictions for the future 2025.
Overall
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, international
tourism
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 will be the highest exported
products
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 in 2025
while
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 the
export
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 of
dairy
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products
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 is the highest for 20.. .
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, the
export
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 of
meat
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products
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 is significantly lower than international
tourism
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 and
dairy
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products
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. In 2025, international
tourism
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 will be the highest exported
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products
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, and just below 10
billion
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 will be exported in that year.
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, in 20.., around 9
billion
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 international
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tourism
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 were exported.
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,
dairy
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products
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 reached approximately 10
billion
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 in 20..,
while
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 in 2000, the
export
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 of
dairy
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products
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were
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 significantly lower than international
tourism
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, which was only around 7
billion
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. In terms of
meat
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products
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, only 6
billion
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meat
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products
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 were exported in 2000.
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, in 20.., the
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export
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exports
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 of
meat
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 were only 5.5
billion
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.
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, in 2025, it will
declined
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 to 5
billion
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, dairy, products, meat, export, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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