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The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.

The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.
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bar graph illustrates information about the three main exports of Scotland which are international
tourism
,
dairy
products
 and
meat
products
 in the
year
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years
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 2000, 20.. and predictions for the future 2025.
Overall
, international
tourism
 will be the highest exported
products
 in 2025
while
 the
export
 of
dairy
products
 is the highest for 20.. .
Moreover
, the
export
 of
meat
products
 is significantly lower than international
tourism
 and
dairy
products
. In 2025, international
tourism
 will be the highest exported
products
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product
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, and just below 10
billion
 will be exported in that year.
Moreover
, in 20.., around 9
billion
 international
tourism
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tourists
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 were exported.
In addition
,
dairy
products
 reached approximately 10
billion
 in 20..,
while
 in 2000, the
export
 of
dairy
products
were
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 significantly lower than international
tourism
, which was only around 7
billion
. In terms of
meat
products
, only 6
billion
meat
products
 were exported in 2000.
Furthermore
, in 20.., the
export
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exports
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 of
meat
 were only 5.5
billion
.
In addition
, in 2025, it will
declined
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decline
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 to 5
billion
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, dairy, products, meat, export, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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