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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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The topic of whether
personality
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 is born with or developed from
life
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experience
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 has been a topic of debate for many years. Some people believe that we are born with personal characteristics that shape our lives,
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 others argue that
life
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 experiences play a more important role in
character
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 building. In my opinion, though both factors are important in influencing our
personality
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, I believe later
life
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 experiences have a major impact. On the one hand, genetic traits undoubtedly play a big part in the foundation of
personality
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.
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, being an introvert or extrovert is often linked to genetics. There are twins that were raised in the same way and have similar
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 experiences but have completely different characters.
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, talents like intelligence, music or sports capability are born with as well.
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 can influence people’s
life
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perspective
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in
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that
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shaped
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shapes
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 different
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character
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characters
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 of lives.
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,
life
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experience
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 plays
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 major role in building people’s
personality
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 and
character
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. There are numerous psychology researches and experiments indicating the influence
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of
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 early
life
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experience
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to
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 one’s emotional security.
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, babies who are being ignored of their basic needs
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tended
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 to develop an insecure
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 in their adult
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,
which
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 they are not able to trust other people and build stable
relationship
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relationships
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. Apart from family
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experience
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, the wider social and cultural environment
also
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 has
great
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 impact
of
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 how the person
perceive
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 the world.
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, though genetic traits
provided
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 a solid foundation in one’s
personality
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 and
character
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,
life
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experience
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 from family and
wider
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the wider
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 social and cultural world
played
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play
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 a more important role in developing people’s
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personality
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personalities
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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