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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers, and IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue.

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For the past few years, a massive group of professionals like engineers, doctors, and IT have migrated to well-known and civilized
countries
. Seeking for better job opportunities and enhanced lifestyle. In
this
 essay, I will tackle the issues and possible solutions for
this
. In every country, there are a lot of working professionals who are underpaid and not recognized. But
this
 is more common
to
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 poorer
countries
 and not well developed.
For instance
, in my country, the Philippines, where a lot of employees have the potential to succeed in their field, didn't have the chance to get promoted or get the right wages that they need.
Therefore
, they are seeking and moving to other civilized
countries
 where they can find good salaries and a better lifestyle. The developed
countries
 Singapore and Australia have bigger opportunities for IT professionals and for other fields of work.
In addition
 to that, the great benefits and compensation are based on the working performance of the individual, and it's being acknowledged. At the same time, excellent experiences and training are provided for the growth of their employees. Despite these circumstances, the government must focus on solving the problems for its citizens. The first is to have a genuine deal with other
countries
, like Singapore. Singapore is well-known to be the
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 of
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business in Asia.
Furthermore
, they can provide
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help for poorer
countries
 through good investments and transactions. Where both
countries
 can benefit from each other.
To conclude
, the least developed
countries
 need to prioritize their citizens and look for the right investment that they can put inside of their sovereignty.
Therefore
, citizens will not look outside of their homeland and stay there with a good quality of lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Human capital
  • Economic growth
  • Technological advancement
  • Healthcare crisis
  • Skill gap
  • Remittances
  • Policy reforms
  • International collaboration
  • Skill transfer
  • Incentive programs
  • Infrastructure
  • Job satisfaction
  • Domestic industries
  • Migration
  • Developing nations
  • Career opportunities
  • Recognition awards
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