Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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as well as
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who always connected with television.
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,many
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who has been televised
talent
shows and these shows are very popular
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while
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some
people
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a good method
to
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finding
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talented
people
.
along with
they find
best
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way to give
entertainment
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am strongly believe
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that owing to most
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people
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the people
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who
has
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find
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their inner
talend
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talent
as well as
they make them
passion
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. On the one hand ,there
are
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multifarious reason why
talent
show
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now
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are now
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most
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popular .To commence with the prominent reason is mostly youngster who has
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with
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their
talent
.
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they have lots
talent
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of talent
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in every field .
Such
as singing,art,music,education,games,etc. which is profitable in every work .
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as
this
kind of
talent
is not only
talent
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a talent
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for them but
also
that is
a passion for them.
likewise
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,if
people
passionate about
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they
not
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like
for
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them
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but
also
they try
to
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how to
get
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master
in
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this
work.For
illstration
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instance
,
number
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the number
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of
people
or
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who
has
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have
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fulfill
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with
worthly
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talant
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talent
which is help to enhance their career .
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they give them
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or inspiration.
On the other hand
,some
people
believe that
this
kind of
show
only
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is only
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for
entertainment
.
Moreover
,many
people
think that they do not have any
talent
.
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This
this
is only fame .
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,if
people
win
talent
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show
and
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will
be
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their
life
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change
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well -known
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person
.
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as live a social life
then
people
watch
thier
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their
show
and
entertainment
. In conclusion,
although
i
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believe that
talent
is
best
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the best
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platform for
person
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a person
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who
fulfill
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fulfil
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their dreams .
As well as
beneficial for
person
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a person
the person
show examples
.But as always it is
to
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too
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many things about it which are not good
.so
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so
we should make an effort to unearth their
talant
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talent
talents
.
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grammar
Try to improve your grammar and sentence structure to avoid confusion. For example, "As well as they have lots talent in every field" could be revised for clarity.
cohesion
Consider using more transition words to improve the logical progression of your ideas. Phrases like "Firstly," "In addition," and "In conclusion" can help guide the reader.
examples
Provide more specific examples to support your points, which can make your argument more compelling.
task response
The essay clearly identifies both sides of the argument regarding talent shows as a method of finding talent versus just entertainment.
task response
Your conclusion attempts to weigh both perspectives, which is a good approach in task response.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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