Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both views. (No opinion)

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Technological advancements have had a profound impact on all aspects of our lives.
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is the biggest invention of
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century. Few
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believe that the rise of the
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removed the differences among
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and made the
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a global village,
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others disagree and think that it has isolated
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and they lost
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interest
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going out and spending time socially. There are various benefits, the
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provided us. First and foremost, is that the
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internet
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is a source of communication and information. The
world
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has become a global village and
people
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are more aware of
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affairs, natural disasters and crucial political events. The
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bombardement
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bombardment
of information and news keeps us updated, about
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useful information.
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, the development in communication is the other benefit of the
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. With the help of
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and video calls, business meetings and communication with relatives
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become a lot easier.
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, in ancient times
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had to wait for months to receive a letter from their loved ones,
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issue has been resolved beautifully with the arrival of the
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. Shifting towards the other view, without any
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scepticism
, the
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has made the
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a global village.
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, it has
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shrinked
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the social circle of individuals, who spend plenty of time on social media platforms and prefer staycation. They watch movies,
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and games
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and do other activities on the
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, which keeps them
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.
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, adults and children spend 10 to 12 hours of their day on the
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,
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and do not even interact with their family members. They are stuck in the
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loop, and
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has
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impact on their physical and mental health.
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, cutting
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oneself
socially only contributes to stress and anxiety.
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, a person may regret
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decision someday. In conclusion, the
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is a miraculous invention, which
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only brought communities together,
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,
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over-use can lead to potential drawbacks which can influence folks in the long run.
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Make sure that each paragraph has one clear main idea, and that each sentence in the paragraph supports that idea for better coherence.
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Include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and provide a more comprehensive discussion.
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Ensure that each side of the argument is equally developed to provide a balanced view.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your discussion well.
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You've effectively discussed both views of the topic, providing a balanced overview.
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Your ideas are generally logically structured and easy to follow, contributing to overall coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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