Some people believe that increasing taxes on various industries will reduce pollution. Whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Pollution is a contentious issue
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in our mother of earth nowadays, where some people think one of the best
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to decrease pollution
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to increase the rate of taxes on various industries.
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others believe that other options might be more effective.
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The essay should provide a structured and balanced view on both perspectives and include a clear conclusion that summarizes the discussion and presents your opinion.
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The essay should improve on logical flow and provide clear topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance coherence.
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It would be beneficial to include more specific examples or arguments to support each point of view discussed.
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You've identified the two main perspectives on the issue of pollution, setting a clear theme for your discussion.
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The essay topic presents a relevant and timely issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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