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Write a letter to a community college in America which invited you to talk about your country. In your letter Accept invitation and suggest preferable dates Tell them what your talks will be about And what equipment you require them to arrange

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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to thank you for inviting me to deliver a speech about my country
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 your prestigious institute. I accept your invitation and I would be more than happy to deliver
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 lecture on 20 June
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 2024. My home nation India is a country of diversity, where over 140 Crore people, despite their different social and religious
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 live
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 respecting each other's sentiments.
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, the prime focus of my speech will be on
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 approach.
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 like to shed some light on how our social history is guiding our
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 society to maintain
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 harmony. In order to, deliver the lecture there are a few things which I need.
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 projector to show a few pictures to the audience.
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, a mic
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 an efficient sound system.
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, a set of
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 markers and a
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 with a stand. I hope you will do your best to fulfil these requirements and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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coherence cohesion
Consider expanding on how each part of your talk connects, ensuring all details are smoothly linked.
task achievement
Add more specific details about your lecture content to better fulfill the task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with greeting and closing.
task achievement
The response fully addresses the prompt by including an acceptance, talk content, and equipment needs.
suitable writing tone
Professional and courteous tone is maintained throughout the letter, appropriate for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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