In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.
In the future, taking a domestic trip will be more important than travelling abroad. I strongly agree with those who feel that people should prefer domestic
holidays
over international holidays
.
Firstly
, choosing to vacation in our country can help develop tourist
sites. Almost all tourist
sites currently have entrance fees and visitors
are required to pay entrance fees before entering the tourist
area. So, the higher the number of visitors
to a tourist
attraction, the more income that tourist
attraction will generate. As a result
, revenue from entering the tourist
area can be used to develop amenities, such
as toilets, rest rooms
, parking areas, and other facilities. Correct your spelling
restrooms
Therefore
, domestic holidays
can be an effective way to develop tourist
attractions
in our country.
Secondly
, visiting tourist
attractions
will help to promote the tourist
spots. When visiting tourist
sites, The visitors
are likely to share their moments on their social media, so the tourist
attraction is increasingly known. It is well-known that social media has a strong influence nowadays. So, the higher the number of visitors
, the more information about tourist
attractions
on social media and it can be a promotional event for visitors
. Thus
, domestic holidays
can help to promote local tourist
attractions
which many people may not know about, such
as the beauty of Padar Island and Labuan Bajo islands.
In conclusion, increasing domestic holidays
in tourist
attractions
allows for the development and promotion of tourist
attractions
. I, therefore
, remain firmly convinced that domestic holidays
should be encouraged as a means to support the local tourism industry and enhance economic growthSubmitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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