Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people are in support of performing
experiment1
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experiments1
of human medicines on
animals
to verify the accuracy.
However
,
other
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others
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are against
this
phenomenon. They believe that
animals
are crucial for the environment.
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of
animals
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animals,
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other measures should be searched. I
also
believe that creatures are vital for
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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, which I will explain
further
. On one hand,
proponent
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proponents
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are in favour of using
animals
in
medicine
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the medicine
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industry. They believe that some
animals
such
as mice, pigs and dogs have
same
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the same
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abilities to handle pain,
suffering
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and suffering
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as humans have. To verify the accuracy of tablets, they select
animals
so that
human
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humans
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can remain safe.
Also
, if for some
reasons
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reason
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,
animals
died
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die
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in experiments they
does8
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do
not cause any harm to companies.
This
means safe medicines can enter into the market. On
other
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the other
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hand, critics argue that these practices can cause harm to
animals
.
For instance
, many
animals
could not survive after taking high doses. Which can
also
cause harm to their breeding. There may be chances of
being
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extinction.
This
can impact the whole ecosystem. If there
will be
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are
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no
animals
the ecology may be affected which will
give
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adverse
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an adverse
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effect on
whole
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environment.
Thus
, they believe that
instead
of
animals
, other ways should be invented. In my opinion, technology is advanced so
scientist
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scientists
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can measure other ways to make sure medicines are safe to
consumed
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consume
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by citizens because
animals
are essential for
environment
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the environment
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, whether to use
animals
or not for finalising the medications is a debatable
topis
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topic
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. But I believe that
animals
should not be
utilize
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utilised
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in any aspect. In
such
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a situation
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situation
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situation,
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new machines can be invented to finalise the accuracy of tablets.
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