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The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.
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The given graph depicts the number of
coffee
export
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exports
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 from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica
during
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between
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 2002 and 2012
Overall
, The amount of
coffee
 that
sold
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was sold
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 to
others country
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other countries
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 of Brazil and Colombia significantly
flucuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 and hit the highest point
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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 of
graph
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the graph
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.
However
, The number of
coffee
 exports
of
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in
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 Costa Rica decreased at the beginning of
time
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the
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 given and reached a peak
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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. Brazil
exports
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exported
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coffee
 around 12
millions
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million
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kilograms
in
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of in
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 2002 and significantly
flucuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
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until
untill
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until
 reached a peak at 25
millions
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million
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kilograms
 in 2012 as same as Colombia which sold 5
millions
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million
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kilograms
 of
coffee
 to
others
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other
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 country in
in
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apply
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2002 and dramatically
flucuates
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fluctuates
fluctuate
 during the given
period
 and
then
 hit the highest
potint
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point
 at 12
millions
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million
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kilograms
 in 2012
In contrast
, In 2012, Costa Rica
exports
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exported
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coffee
 15
millions
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million
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kilograms
and
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which
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 decreased to about 8
millions
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million
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kilograms
 in 2006 and
then
 increased to
the
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a
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 peak
at
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of
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 20
millions
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million
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kilograms
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 given
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, period, millions, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Illustrates
  • Amount
  • Exported
  • Abroad
  • Capacity
  • Trends
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Significant
  • Peaks
  • Troughs
  • Reasons
  • Climate
  • Demand
  • Trade policies
  • Compare and contrast
  • Fluctuations
  • Economic conditions
  • Agricultural developments
  • Unique elements
  • Production scale
  • Market strategy
  • Global coffee demand
  • Agricultural technology
  • International trade agreements
  • Competitiveness
  • Quality
  • Reputation
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