The bar and pie charts below illustrate how many people use the internet and the average amount of money spent on the internet in five different countries.
The bar chart below shows how many people use the internet.
In contrast
, the pie chart illustrates the average number of money spent on shopping on the Linking Words
internet
in five different cities. Capitalize word
Internet
Overall
, Sweden Linking Words
is
the highest percentage of people using the Verb problem
has
internet
. At the same time. The US was the biggest amount of money for one person.
Capitalize word
Internet
To begin
with, what stands out is that Spain has the lowest rate Linking Words
by
only 5%. Change preposition
of
Also
, France has twice the number of Spain by 10 per cent. Linking Words
Moreover
, Sweden was the most country in the statistics using the web by 35%. Linking Words
Additionally
, Germany was the middle average by 20%. Linking Words
Lastly
, Linking Words
UK
was the second high city.
Correct article usage
the UK
On the other hand
, one noticeable thing Linking Words
that
the UK society spent 87 euros for one user. Add a missing verb
is that
Also
, Sweden nation Linking Words
pay
76 euros per person. Change the verb form
pays
Furthermore
, the difference between France and Germany Linking Words
just
11 euro. Add a missing verb
is just
Lastly
, Spain did not pay attention Linking Words
for
shopping on the web. They just Change preposition
to
using
10 euro for every personWrong verb form
use
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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