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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it has become easier to learn languages than ever before.
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, there are many multilingual
people
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 across the globe.
However
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, some
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 still argue that knowing a new language is only beneficial for immigration and travel purposes.
On the other hand
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, a group of individuals with whom I side
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, claim there are more reasons to
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 matter.
This
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 essay is a
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discussion
 between both points of view.
To begin
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 with, it should be considered that some
people
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 might find it difficult to start learning a new language or the fact that they are never going to use it keeps them from doing so. In detail, they prefer to spend that time on another
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desired
 skill. Yet some others including myself are eager to start knowing new languages and count it as a valuable skill even though they might never move to a different country.
In contrast
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, the second group see
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 as a tool to improve communication and intake knowledge.
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, by being able to understand more than one language individuals not only can expand their cultural understandings, but they can
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 go on vocations to the destination countries and enhance their cognitive skills by being in touch with
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 from that culture. Building personal relationships,
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 greater opportunities in life or a job are
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 some of the many other benefits of
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 subject. As an example, I would not be able to get access to any of these educational facilities if I did not know English. In conclusion,
while
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 some
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 might prefer to perform other tasks rather than learn a new way of communication, it could not mean that the only purpose of doing it is meant for immigration or trips, as there are a bunch of other reasons that justify it, which I mentioned above.

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Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main argument and is logically connected to the previous one. Consider using more linking words to improve the flow of ideas.
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Include more specific examples to support your points, particularly in the body paragraphs, to strengthen your argument.
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Expand your conclusion to summarize the key points discussed in the essay, making it clearer for the reader.
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You have presented a clear contrasting view on the reasons for learning a foreign language, which adds depth to your discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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