In many countries paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common . does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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In the modern era,
the
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technology
has rapidly increased in all countries, Especially, mobile
phones
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usage is highly demanded by
people
to
use
the different
applications
for their
payments
.
However
, It is essential and
also
common. There are some advantages
as well as
disadvantages. In
this
essay, we will discuss both conditions.
To begin
with,
people
have more benefits to
use
a mobile phone for their fund transactions.
For instance
, recently, research on
technology
has given a statement of fund transfer through online apps like Google Pay, PhonePe, and Paytm is widely available and importantly, more than 1 billion
people
are using these
applications
, which is really a useful
technology
to them.
Additionally
,
this
technology
is useful for reducing many loan
payments
easily and
also
does not need to wait or go
for
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bank
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the bank
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,
people
can pay through their mobile
phones
easily.
On the other hand
, the main disadvantage is handling methods of mobile
phones
by
people
.
For example
, if someone operates a payment application in the wrong touch that could be more difficult for them, it might be sending a payment to an unknown person.
Moreover
, mobile
phones
can be easily threatened by hackers.
People
should be aware before sending a payment.
Apart from
this
, there are a plethora of
applications
for
payments
but
people
should
use
a minimum number of requirements.
To conclude
,
people
use
mobile
phones
widely
as well as
,
also
use
for sending
payments
. It has solid merits fund transfer to online
applications
is a very easy method and time can be saved but
as well as
if operated in the wrong method the money will sent to an unknown account.
Thus
,
this
mobile phone has more advantages than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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