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Mrs Barret, an English -speaking woman who lives in your town ,has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barret. in your letter Suggest how you could help her in her home Say why you would like to do this Job Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barret, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in the job that you advertised recently. I can assist you in various household tasks
such
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 as cleaning the room floors, walls and washrooms, decorating rooms, gardening, and purchasing groceries. I believe that I will be helpful to you in every
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. I got an opportunity to go abroad for a caretaking job in an apartment complex. I would like to improve my communication skills and to practice caretaking activities. I believe that if I join with you
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then
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 I will get more time to interact with you, and in
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 a way, I can improve my English communication skills.
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, I will get an opportunity to showcase my caretaking skills. I will be available from Monday to Friday, morning and evening. But
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 I will not be available on weekends. Because I will have IELTS coaching on weekends. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Rahul

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about how you can help in the home.
task response
For task response: The tone is polite, but some lines sound a little formal or not natural. Keep the style warm and clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Some ideas in the body are too long. Make each paragraph hold one main point.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Use link words in a simple way, like also, so, and because.
task response
For task response: You cover how you can help, why you want the job, and when you are free.
task response
For task response: The letter is polite and suitable for this kind of job request.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are correct and clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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