Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Rich nations should welcome fugitives and give them their basic needs
such
as homes and food. Linking Words
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essay totally agrees with Linking Words
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statement because it is a moral thing to help them and host countries could benefit those people as they do labour work.
It is Linking Words
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right thing to help those who escaped from their community because of war. Sometimes it is difficult for people to leave their own country, but those who suffer from poverty and war are forced to escape to seek help from other nations. Correct article usage
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As a result
, they should be allowed to live in houses and work in jobs to provide for themselves and their families. Linking Words
For example
, the government of Saudi Arabia reported that 65% of Syrian people are welcome to continue their lives as citizens during the period of war in Syria.
Fugitives may have a positive impact on the state where they moved to. They could do labour work for a small amount of money to pay for their needs. Linking Words
Therefore
, Linking Words
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could increase the number of paid taxes which leads to the economic growth of the hosted country. Linking Words
For instance
, Linking Words
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Sunday Times reported that Correct article usage
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US
is one of the strongest Correct article usage
the US
state
in the economy because it accepts refugees and immigrants from countries all over the world.
In conclusion, it is morally good to aid fugitives with their essential needs and they have a considerable effect on the economic increase of the host country . I Change to a plural noun
states
therefore
believe that they should be accepted by wealthy communitiesLinking Words
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The essay presents relevant and mostly clear ideas regarding the moral obligation and potential economic benefits of accepting refugees.
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