The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie charts provide key information about the use of electricity in 1995 and 2005 in various industries. The units are measured in percentages.

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, it is clear from the graph that manufacturing and

household

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are

demonestraiting

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demonstrating

on spending electricity with a

litle

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little

climb.

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, service shows

significant

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increase during the same period,

whereas

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fishery and food are still having

high

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percentage

netherless

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nonetheless

nether less

the decrease they had.

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what is shown, there is a

slightely

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slightly

growth in

the

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both sectors manufacturing and household, manufacturing has been shrinking by 2%, and

also

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household

with

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5%,

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the two industries were

equals

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at 48

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% they

had became

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51%.

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, service made a huge

swift

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shift

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from 8% to 15% which is the biggest rise between the five industries. In terms of the two sectors fishery and food

were

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decreased by 10% for both, food was using 24%

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it reduced to 21%,

moreover

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fishery

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the fishery

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has made the highest shrink by 7% from 20%

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13% .

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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pie charts
industries
electricity usage
1995
2005
comparison
increase
decrease
service sector
manufacturing sector
residential sector
agricultural sector
main features
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