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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide information about the
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 distribution of the populations in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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, in Yemen, the
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group
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 15-59 constituted more than half of the people in 2000, with a projected increase by 2050. The population of those aged 60 and above is
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 expected to rise,
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 the proportion of children aged 0-14 is predicted to decrease. In Italy, a significant increase is projected in the 60+
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group
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 by 2050,
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 both the 0-14 and 15-59
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 groups are anticipated to see a decline. In Yemen in 2000, children aged 0-14 represented half of the community (50.1%),
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 the 15-59 and 60+
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 groups accounted for 46.3% and 3.6%, respectively. By 2050, the 15-59
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 is expected to increase to 57.3%, and the 60+
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 to 5.7%.
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, the proportion of children aged 0-14 is anticipated to decrease significantly to 37%. In Italy in 2000, the 15-59
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 held the largest share at 61.6%, followed by the 60+
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 at 24.1%, and the 0-14
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 at 14.3%. By 2050, the 60+
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 is projected to grow substantially to 42.3%, reflecting an ageing population.
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, the 15-59
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 is expected to decline to 46.2%, and the 0-14
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 is predicted to drop slightly to 11.5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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