The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the reasons that contribute to
happiness
among two distinct age categories: individuals under 30 and those over 30 years old.
Use synonyms
Overall
, the most popular reason for both groups is achievement at work, followed by hobbies as the second largest contributor. For people under 30, additional significant factors include having a good appearance and Linking Words
traveling
, Change the spelling
travelling
whereas
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for
those over 30, financial security and spending time with family are the other major contributors.
Achievement at work is the primary reason for Add the comma(s)
, for
happiness
in both age groups, accounting for just over 30 Use synonyms
percent
in each category. Change the spelling
per cent
Furthermore
, hobbies represent the next largest Linking Words
percentages
, with 22% of young people and 24% of older individuals citing them as a source of joy. Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
However
, other factors account for a lower total, at 14% among individuals under 30 and just 10% for those over 30.
For the younger group, having a good appearance and Linking Words
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
make up
18% and 15% of their Join the words
makeup
happiness
, respectively. Use synonyms
In contrast
, for the older group, financial security and family time collectively account for 34% of their Linking Words
overall
Linking Words
happiness
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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