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The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the
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The
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Ozone
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 over
Antartica
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Antarctica
by three different gases between 1980 and 2000.
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, it is evident that as time
had
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passed
Ozone
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 depletion
had
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increased and
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effect
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the effect
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 of CFC-11
Gas
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gas
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effect
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 on
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Ozone
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the Ozone
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layer
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had
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droped
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dropped
 significantly in 20
years
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. It is illustrated in the graphs that
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Ozone
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the Ozone
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 hole size over
Antartica
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Antarctica
 in
year
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the year
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 1980 was at around 400
square
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kilometer
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kilometers
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, which had a surge in
area
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the area
an area
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 reaching around 1900
square
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kilometer
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kilometers
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 in 1990.
In
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From
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 the
years
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 1990 to 1993,
was
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the time when
Ozone
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layer
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 had recovered by 800
Square
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kilometer
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kilometers
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,
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 before it
was
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skyrocketed to its highest point of 4000
square
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kilometer
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kilometers
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.
In the
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 second graph, which had
reavealed
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revealed
 that CFC-11 Gas was the most prominent to
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effect
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affect
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 the
Ozone
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layer
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 in the initial
years
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 of
1980s
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the 1980s
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, with 68 tonnes and least prominent after 20
years
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 with negligible numbers.
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 other two gases had a significant
effect
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 on the
Ozone
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layer
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 by the year 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ozone, effect, layer, years, square, kilometer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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