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You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ......... .... .. ... .... ............. .................. .... ,

#hours #study #part #time #boss #work #studies #employer #addresses
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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am an employee in
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 development department of your company, and I am writing
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 letter to urge you to kindly reduce my working hours. I want to join a part-time course on applications of Artificial Intelligence in software designing, which would enable me to use the latest tools and features of potential future technology in order to enhance my productivity.
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, I am looking forward to
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 evening classes to fulfil these aspirations. The
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 of the part-time course is 6.00 PM to 8.00 PM.
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, I would like to leave the office at 4.45 PM, because the institute is far from our workplace. In order to, compensate I am willing to come to the office before normal working hours so that I can finish all the tasks which are assigned to me. It is a well-known fact that
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technologies like Artificial Intelligence, which will not only reduce our workload but
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save
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 time.
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, by learning
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 course I am willing to train my fellow workers as well, which would be fruitful for the company in future. I hope you will understand my viewpoint and allow me to do the same. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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language
There are some minor language inaccuracies in the text. You might want to revise these to ensure clarity and grammatical precision.
task response
Consider expanding the explanation of how your part-time studies will benefit your employer to further strengthen the task achievement.
writing tone
The letter maintains a professional and respectful tone throughout.
coherence
Each paragraph is focused and clearly presents a single idea, aiding the overall readability of the letter.
structure
The letter is clearly structured with a proper greeting and closing.
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