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Nowadays many people believe that children should be taught history in schools, however, others argue that children should learn subjects that are more helpful for modern everyday life. discuss both views and give your opinion

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These days most folks believe that kids should learn about
history
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 subject in school ,
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 others believe that children should learn different kinds of
subjects
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 that assist them in everyday life.
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,
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 the latter view. On the one hand, some
people
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 argue that
history
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 should be compulsory to learn in school because it brings benefits to society,
people
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 ,and the
country
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 ,and it maintains the identity and culture of the
country
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. To illustrate that they believe that if students preserve their heritage, ancient materials
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 as old weapons, and ancient books they can browse from the past
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further
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solving
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problems
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financial and economic issues. A prime example of
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 Hind school in Oman they did a tiny museum and included unique books about famous
people
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 sharing their experiences about their life in the past
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 to that they shared steps about how you can deal with
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.
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, students can benefit from these books in learning to solve
problems
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 that happen in future.
On the other hand
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, despite from argument above, some
people
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 argue that pupils should learn
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another educational program
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 which can help them in everyday life
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 as mathematics, science,
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,and biology.
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, because they are living in rapid technology ,and it requires
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subjects
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for example
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, mathematics teaches them how they can think in critical thinking and in an analytical way
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, they can tackle
problems
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 that happen in the
country
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for example
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 financial issues and economic challenges.
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, they can find jobs easily because most jobs require knowledge about technology, and how you can deal with numbers and
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 solving.
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,
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 would help to develop the
country
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 more in economic growth. In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that
history
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 plays a vital role for students to preserve the identity of the
country
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,
whereas
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 others disagree with
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 because they argue that there are other
subjects
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 that are more important than
history
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. I firmly believe that
subjects
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such
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 as mathematics, science, and technology are the most important than
history
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.
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Ensure that all arguments are explored thoroughly and each point is well-explained. A bit more in-depth analysis could strengthen the task response.
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The essay provides clear viewpoints on both sides of the argument, which shows a thorough understanding of the topic.
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The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the main arguments of the essay.
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