Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: – Describe what you did for your last birthday – Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday – Talk about something you are looking forward to

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Dear Maninder, I hope

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letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I

filled

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was filled

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with joy to

recieve

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receive

your letter on my birthday

last

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week. I am writing

this

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letter to tell you

that

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apply

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what I am up to in my life. I turned nineteen

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week. Our family and my friends surprised me with a birthday party at our place. Before

that

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that,

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I went to

temple

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the temple

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to seek blessings from

almighty

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the almighty

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Besides

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this

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, I did some charity by giving away some of my old clothes to

needy

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the needy

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, we had a family dinner, which gave us an opportunity to spend some quality time with each other. I hope you

must be

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are

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doing

good

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well

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in the US. I got to know from

father

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Father

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that you went

for

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a vacation to New York

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month. I know you must have taken your camera

along with

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you too.

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, it would be great, if you could e-mail me a few pictures of that holiday. Currently, I am preparing for my high school exams and afterwards, I am planning to prepare for some

competative

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competitive

exams

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as NEET. In order to, get entry

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into

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a professional course. I wish to seek some guidance from you on

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as well. I hope you will write

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to me

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this

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and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.

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coherence cohesion

Work on ensuring concise sentence structures to enhance clarity.

task achievement

Ensure all main points are detailed to improve task response.

task achievement

The letter effectively maintains a warm and personal tone, suitable for a letter to a sibling.

coherence cohesion

The paragraphs are well-organized with a clear progression of ideas.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

230 words

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