Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: – Describe what you did for your last birthday – Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday – Talk about something you are looking forward to

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Dear J, Hope you're doing great, I received your letter

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week only and am glad to hear that you got recently promoted to senior vice president, that's bravo, and

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, your hard work paid off. I was not able to write to you soon as I was a bit occupied lately with some urgent office deliveries which are due soon.

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, I'm doing great and recently travelled to Japan,

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that was an unplanned official trip but

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my birthday

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lies on the same day. So, it was a blast birthday celebration as some of my office mates arranged a surprise party. We spent most of our time in club and bar hopping, enjoyed local music and delicious food

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tons of mesmerising memories, Coming to that, I am still waiting for the pictures that we had during your

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birthday celebration, could you help to upload those on share drive

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really need it, As I'm working on a combined short video that

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would like to dedicate to our 10 years of friendship. I hope to catch you soon as

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I'm planning to visit Singapore next month and would to explore the nightlife and local food , especially the hawker centre, i heard they have plenty of options for vegetarian meals. See you soon. Thank You

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coherence cohesion

Consider breaking down longer paragraphs into smaller ones focusing on a single idea to enhance readability.

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Clarify the request for your sibling to share photos - specifying a deadline might be useful.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are warm, fitting the tone of a letter to a sibling.

task achievement

The letter effectively updates your sibling on recent experiences and plans, satisfying the task requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

221 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company or organization. Might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In the past, most employed people went to a place of work to do their jobs. These days, more and more people are choosing to work from home. What are the reasons for this change? is this a positive or a negative development?

Many people today, especially in the developed world, are choosing to have fewer children, or none at all. Why is this happening, and do you think it is a good trend? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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