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Some people think that schools should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some individuals argue that
students
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 must select schools following their
eductional
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educational
 skills. Others,
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nonetheless
 are
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 the opinion that for schools they ought to study
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 their passions and various abilities as much as possible. I agree more with the latter viewpoint,
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this
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 essay will discuss the key factors contributing to these ideas.
To begin
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 with, there are some exact reasons that explain why humans suggest
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school
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a school
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depent
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dependent
child's
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a child's
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 academic abilities. In schools,
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 impossible to pay attention
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whole
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 class with their different abilities and passions
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for
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 study. If we want to have
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 future for our country and have
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 level of education,
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Moreover
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 it will be beneficial and
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bring a lot of
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successful
 improvements in
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 sphere.
For
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instance
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students
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 who have
same
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the same
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 academic capabilities could allow teachers to teach effectively,
which
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schooleers
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schoolers
 will be curious
of
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about
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 what they are studying.
Additionaly
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Additionally
 learners will have
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a fascinationg
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fascinationg
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fascinating
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 various topics.
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, if a lot of
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a number
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 of
schoolchild
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schoolchildren
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 study
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 a various talent it will be beneficial and have many
such
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a
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apply
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good
affects
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effects
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to
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 them. It not only
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creates
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 a
competetive
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competitive
 aura between the
students
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, but it
also
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 creates
a
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 opportunity to learn new
capacity
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capacities
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 between each of them.
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example
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 my sister moved to
the
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a
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 school with higher education with
a
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apply
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massive
students
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 who have
differents
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different
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tallents
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talents
. Nowadays she can fluently speak
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English
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 and
russian
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Russian
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 as her
environwent
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environment
 does too. In conclusion, both views
are
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have
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 has own pros and cons.
Although
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 I believe that studying with children who have different
ability
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abilities
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 will be better.

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coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure and grammar to clarify the argument.
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Ensure each main point is clearly supported with relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on presenting a balanced view before stating your opinion clearly.
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The essay presents both viewpoints, which is essential for the task.
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A personal example is used to support one of the points, adding relevance.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and a conclusion, ensuring a complete response.
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