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The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010

The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010
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The charts give a breakdown of
class
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 sizes in primary schools across four Australian regions in 2010.
Overall
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,
classes
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 having 21-25
students
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 held the largest share in all four states surveyed, except for South
Australia
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, where
classes
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 with under 20
students
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 were most common.
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,
classes
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 containing over 29
students
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 were a rarity in these areas.Looking first at New South Wales, 37% of the primary-level
classes
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 in
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 state had 21-25
students
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, followed closely by those with 26-30 and fewer than 20
students
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 (33% and 26% respectively). In South
Australia
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, meanwhile, the percentages of
classes
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 comprising under 31
students
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 ranged from 28% to 36%, with
classes
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 having a maximum of 20
students
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 being the most popular. Notably, the figures for the biggest
class
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size
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 in both states were the same, each standing at only 4%.Turning to
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Australia
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 Capital Territory,
classes
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 consisting of 21-25
students
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 constituted the majority, at just over half of all
class
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 sizes listed, compared to 38% of
classes
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 having no more than 20
students
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.
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 was in stark contrast to
classes
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 with 26-30
students
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, making up one-tenth of the total, ten times higher than the smallest
class
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size
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. In Western
Australia
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, the predominant
class
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size
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 was, again, 21-25
students
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, occupying 42%,
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 a negligible difference was observed in the proportions of
classes
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 with under 20 and 26-30
students
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, with figures of 26% and 27%, in that order. In the
last
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 position was the largest
class
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size
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, as its share was only 5%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words class, classes, students, australia, size with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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