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The graph provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australian who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007

The graph provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australian who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US,
UK
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, and
Australia
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 who studied abroad from 2002 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the
number
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 of
students
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 from each country fluctuated over the given period, with the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 experiencing a rise in numbers,
while
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 the US showed a decline. In 2002, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US was the highest, at around 50,000, followed by
Australia
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 at just over 40,000, and the
UK
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 at approximately 30,000.
However
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, by 2003, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US started to decrease significantly, falling to around 40,000 by 2004.
In contrast
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, the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 saw gradual increases during the same period, with the
UK
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 reaching around 40,000 and
Australia
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 approaching 50,000 by 2004. From 2004 to 2007, the trend for
students
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 from the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 continued upward. The
number
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 of
UK
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students
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 increased steadily, reaching approximately 55,000 by 2007,
while
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Australia
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 saw a sharp rise, surpassing 60,000 in the same year.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US continued to decline, dropping to around 30,000 by 2007. In conclusion,
while
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 from the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 studying abroad rose steadily over the years, the
number
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 of US
students
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 declined during the period from 2002 to 2007.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, uk, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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