It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance sports or music and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any children can be thaught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your opinion.
These days, there is ongoing debate regarding Talent for children. In consequence, opinions are divided, some sections of society hold an opinion that each child has a specific skill which demonstrated since early childhood,
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others consider that discipline, dedication and time can develop a new skill. I absolutely agree with Linking Words
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As far as kids that are born with gifted abilities, there are several arguments to support the notion that in some cases genes can be transmitted from parents to the baby and with Linking Words
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, creatures might acquire interests, tastes and abilities. Linking Words
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idea has been supported by the fact that researchers found out that in the mother's gestation, human beings can generate 75 % of their future capacities. Linking Words
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, the recognised pianist Joundion knew about different melodies when he was 2 years old before he could even talk. Linking Words
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, a vocation can be learned when people dedicate time and concentration.
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, when kids practice many times any craft they can forge a lifetime talent, since improve their new techniques and they become professionals in their own field. Linking Words
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, the talented ballet dancer Katrina Polobich did not have the body measures to fit in the academy companies, despite Linking Words
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, she trained for many years on her own, until she became the best choreography artist and she passed the final test, Linking Words
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she studied in the best academy of the world, currently she is the best performer.
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, as much you practice, you will acquire a better set of skills.Linking Words
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Coherence
Ensure that you clearly delineate the two perspectives you are discussing in the introduction to establish a balanced discussion.
Coherence
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Cohesion
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Task Response
Incorporate more diverse examples to strengthen your arguments in both viewpoints.
Introduction
Your introduction clearly sets up the debate and expresses your opinion unequivocally.
Task Achievement
You make effective use of real-world figures to underline your points, such as the pianist and the ballet dancer examples.
Conclusion
Strong concluding sentence that reaffirms your position and provides a takeaway for readers.