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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Huy Tran

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Introduction
In the contemporary era,
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environment
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the environment
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play
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 an important role in
people
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people's
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 life. Some people believe that protecting the
environment
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 is the
goverment
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government
 is responsibility.
While
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 others argue that every individual should be responsible for it. In
this
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 paragraph,
i
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I
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 will discuss both views and give my point of view
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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, there are many reasons why
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
have
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has
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responsibility
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a responsibility
the responsibility
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in protecting
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to protect
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 the
environment
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.
Firstly
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
give
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gives
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a rules
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rules
a rule
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 to protect the
environment
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such
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 as do not fall water
poluted
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polluted
 down
sea
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the sea
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,
control
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and control
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 the
caxbon
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Caxbon
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dioside
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dioxide
. It is being well in controlling the
caxbon
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carbon
dioside
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dioxide
, the
vehicals
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vehicles
 in the modern city reduce better than in the past.
Secondly
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, through the water
bottle
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 down
sea
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the sea
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 by
citizen
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citizens
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make
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apply
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water
poluttion
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pollution
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are control
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are controlled
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 by
rule
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the rule
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 of government.
Conclusion
Some others argue that every citizen should be responsible
with
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for
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 the
environment
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. Some
reaschers
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researchers
teachers
 invented
car
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cars
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 active by electric energy to replace
fossi
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fossil
 fuel energy.
This
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 not only safe
environment
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 but
also
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save
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saves
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 money
of
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for
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 people who buy
this
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 car

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grammar
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content
Clarify points with more specific examples to strengthen the argument.
structure
Develop a stronger conclusion to effectively encapsulate your thoughts and provide a clear stance.
content
The essay includes relevant viewpoints on both sides of the discussion, demonstrating an understanding of the task.
structure
Logical flow between points is present, making it relatively easy for the reader to follow the arguments.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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