NOWADAYS IN MANY COUNTRIES WOMEN HAVE FULL TIME JOBS.THEREFORE,IT IS LOGICAL TO SHARE HOUSEHOLD TASKS EVENLY BETWEEN MEN AND WOMEN.TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

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you are not only teaching them how to learn simple household

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improving their skills.

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focused on taking care of their kids and their husbands specially

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of us are sometimes tired we really need each

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Try to develop your ideas further with more detailed examples and explanations to provide a fully developed response.

coherence and cohesion

Work on enhancing the logical progression between your points to achieve better coherence.

coherence and cohesion

You provide a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing your essay well.

task response

You share personal experiences to support your points, making the essay relatable.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
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although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

167 words

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