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A restaurant near your home is making a lot of noise. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter Describe the problems you are facing How it solve this problem and suggest solution What will you do if it cannot solve this problem

#restaurant #home #noise #manager
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to make you aware
about
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of
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 the issue I
am
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have been
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 facing
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 couple of days
by
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with
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 the noise created by your restaurant which is next door to my house no. 8
mccleave
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McCleary
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. I am encountering the
problem
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 of noise from music which is happening almost
everyday
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every day
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 at night
time
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 around 11 pm, making it difficult for me to fall asleep as I am a
full
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full-time
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time
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 worker, I have to get up early in the morning to arrive at work but
due to
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 less sleep at
night
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night,
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 I am not able to get up or even if I get up I feel less energetic and less productive at work.
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, I request you to find
a
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 appropriate solution for creating less noise. I think
by
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apply
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putting temporary
sound proof
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soundproof
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 walls around your
reastaurant
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restaurant
 can reduce
this
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 issue for
sometimes
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some time
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. At the same
time
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,
music
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the music
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 system should not be allowed after 11 pm to get rid
off
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of
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this
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problem
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. If you cannot do that please arrange your sitting area inside of your restaurant where people can
listen
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 music and enjoy their
time
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. I kindly request you to find a solution
for
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to
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this
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problem
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 as soon as possible. If not,
then
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 I will be left with no option
to
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but to
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 report
this
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problem
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 to local city authorities who will not only charge you a huge amount of fine but may suspend your
licesne
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license
 for a couple of months, which will
resist
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prevent
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 you
to open
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from opening
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 your restaurant. I hope you will consider my request, and if you need any suggestions regarding
this
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 feel free to call me. Yours faithfully, Amanjot Kaur.
Submitted by amanjotkaur0303 on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphs focus on specific ideas for better clarity.
task achievement
Proofread for minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
greeting and closing
Polite and appropriate opening and closing statements.
complete response
Effectively communicated the main issue and potential consequences.
logical structure
Smooth flow in addressing the problem and suggesting solutions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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